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Apr. 15th, 2010 10:53 pm[He knows it's time. He can barely breathe, and his body's covered in dark marks beneath his shirt. And he's done nothing more than resign himself to his fate now. Riqis, Namine, Xion, Ven... It's his turn.
Roxas has put himself in his room to wait it out, sitting on his bed in the corner. He's kept watch over the network for a long time and knows that Ven and Xion are back... But what about the rest?]
Are... Are Riqis and Namine back yet? And- And what about the others? Who... [A wet cough.] Who else is sick? Are we missing anyone?
[The feed runs a little longer until it abruptly turns off before he starts coughing again. He uncurls his knees from his chest and holds tight to his communicator, waiting for responses. He has to know.]
Roxas has put himself in his room to wait it out, sitting on his bed in the corner. He's kept watch over the network for a long time and knows that Ven and Xion are back... But what about the rest?]
Are... Are Riqis and Namine back yet? And- And what about the others? Who... [A wet cough.] Who else is sick? Are we missing anyone?
[The feed runs a little longer until it abruptly turns off before he starts coughing again. He uncurls his knees from his chest and holds tight to his communicator, waiting for responses. He has to know.]
What...What is this place? And why do they have that symbol here?
[His voice sounds a little shaky, but he sighs.]
Is he responsible for bringing us here? I thought those gods had...
Maybe we were right all along about him still being alive.
[His voice sounds a little shaky, but he sighs.]
Is he responsible for bringing us here? I thought those gods had...
Maybe we were right all along about him still being alive.
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Mar. 15th, 2010 02:47 pmHe's...
Castiel's dead. He's being taken to the clinic, but we'll have to wait on him. He was the reason for the burst of light.
Zexion, where do you want to meet?
[He sounds like he wants to say something else, but the line quickly cuts.]
Castiel's dead. He's being taken to the clinic, but we'll have to wait on him. He was the reason for the burst of light.
Zexion, where do you want to meet?
[He sounds like he wants to say something else, but the line quickly cuts.]
I guess we're just in one of those cycles of losing people again. A lot of people. It's been almost a year since we last lost so many... [A soft, sardonic laugh.]
I don't know what to think anymore. Axel left, then Sheik and the others, then Elena and Prince-
And now Axel's gone again too.
A long time ago, I was the one who kept leaving and coming back, they said. Now I'm the one who's been here the longest in World's End. And it's so...
[He doesn't finish, his voice sounding monotonous and strained. He just turns off the communicator.]
( Private )
I don't know what to think anymore. Axel left, then Sheik and the others, then Elena and Prince-
And now Axel's gone again too.
A long time ago, I was the one who kept leaving and coming back, they said. Now I'm the one who's been here the longest in World's End. And it's so...
[He doesn't finish, his voice sounding monotonous and strained. He just turns off the communicator.]
( Private )
[The post rolls for several moments with barely a sound coming from the room. Finally, there's a quiet, muffled groan, and the shift of bed springs can be heard. There's an even longer stretch of silence before Roxas' voice, sleepy, can be heard.]
...Riqis, why are you in my bed?
It's my bed, Roxas. ...And how long have you been awake? [Another shift of springs, and then a cry from both of them.] Roxas!
I'm fine. Just...woke up. Where-
The Sanctuary. You've been out for almost a week.
[There's another silence, and then a sigh.] Oh.
[The silence stretches on again, and then, suddenly, Riqis' voice is heard.] Hey, do my teeth look like they're going to fall out to you?
...What? [And then the post times out.]
...Riqis, why are you in my bed?
It's my bed, Roxas. ...And how long have you been awake? [Another shift of springs, and then a cry from both of them.] Roxas!
I'm fine. Just...woke up. Where-
The Sanctuary. You've been out for almost a week.
[There's another silence, and then a sigh.] Oh.
[The silence stretches on again, and then, suddenly, Riqis' voice is heard.] Hey, do my teeth look like they're going to fall out to you?
...What? [And then the post times out.]
[There's silence for several moments, before a soft sigh and then a forced, quiet laugh.]
You guys can keep those candies. I'll settle for ice cream. It's not the same, but it's close enough.
But isn't it a little early for Valentine's Day? Wasn't it on the fourteenth last year?
[There's an intake of breath, like he's going to say something else, but then the post cuts off.]
( Organization XIII filter; INCLUDING Axel )
( Locked to the New Gods )
You guys can keep those candies. I'll settle for ice cream. It's not the same, but it's close enough.
But isn't it a little early for Valentine's Day? Wasn't it on the fourteenth last year?
[There's an intake of breath, like he's going to say something else, but then the post cuts off.]
( Organization XIII filter; INCLUDING Axel )
( Locked to the New Gods )
[The picture is slow to focus, first on endless green grass and then on one big, black, glassy eye staring down into the communicator. Large jaws are cut off by the edges of the screen, but splatters of blood accompany the image, dripping from the yellowed bared teeth.
Suddenly, the screen shifts quickly, up to blue sky and then covered by black. Roxas sighs, heavy and irritated, before his voice is heard from just off camera.]
...You wanted meat? You've got it.
[A ragged, angered noise follows.]
I hate this place.
Suddenly, the screen shifts quickly, up to blue sky and then covered by black. Roxas sighs, heavy and irritated, before his voice is heard from just off camera.]
...You wanted meat? You've got it.
[A ragged, angered noise follows.]
I hate this place.
Those... Those keys she had on her. Discordia. Those keys were for the Door. I don't know how she got them, but I have them, they've got all of our names-
[He sounds like a babbling idiot, and so he just sighs.]
If you want your key, come get it. I'll be at the fountain.
[He sounds like a babbling idiot, and so he just sighs.]
If you want your key, come get it. I'll be at the fountain.
What have you done to him!?
[Oro is barking, almost obnoxiously, in the background, as Roxas' voice becomes distant.]
Give him back to me. Give me back my friend!
[Oro whimpers suddenly, and then Roxas is yelling. There's a loud slam in the background, and several moments of complete silence. It's almost as if the post has turned off, but then footsteps echo near the device. There's the soft scrape of metal, and another whimper from Oro.]
I'm sorry. I promised I'd-
[The rest of what's said is mostly muted out because of the distance between the boy and the communicator, until...]
Please, come back. Please.
[There's a choked noise, and Oro begins to howl loud enough, and close enough, to the device to successfully mask the loud cry Roxas gives just before the post clicks off.]
[Oro is barking, almost obnoxiously, in the background, as Roxas' voice becomes distant.]
Give him back to me. Give me back my friend!
[Oro whimpers suddenly, and then Roxas is yelling. There's a loud slam in the background, and several moments of complete silence. It's almost as if the post has turned off, but then footsteps echo near the device. There's the soft scrape of metal, and another whimper from Oro.]
I'm sorry. I promised I'd-
[The rest of what's said is mostly muted out because of the distance between the boy and the communicator, until...]
Please, come back. Please.
[There's a choked noise, and Oro begins to howl loud enough, and close enough, to the device to successfully mask the loud cry Roxas gives just before the post clicks off.]
locked - mostly unhackable}
Dec. 22nd, 2009 10:03 pmIt's fake. It's all just lies. Why would someone - anyone - bring her here?
Why aren't you here to help me? I thought we were supposed to be best friends. I thought this was supposed to be our next life. I need help.
...I can't do this. I just- I can't.
Why aren't you here to help me? I thought we were supposed to be best friends. I thought this was supposed to be our next life. I need help.
...I can't do this. I just- I can't.
Yes, I'm back. No, I didn't die. I didn't leave the city. It doesn't matter now, but if anyone could tell me what all happened these past few days...other than those dark monsters...I'd be grateful.
Prince, Konan... Maybe you two can fill me in? Ada, can I talk to you too? You didn't think I'd forget to say hi, did you?
Oh. And I didn't forget. Happy Birthday, Naminé.
( [Private to Terra | Unhackable] )
( [Private | Unhackable] )
Prince, Konan... Maybe you two can fill me in? Ada, can I talk to you too? You didn't think I'd forget to say hi, did you?
Oh. And I didn't forget. Happy Birthday, Naminé.
( [Private to Terra | Unhackable] )
( [Private | Unhackable] )
Tags:
-n earthquake? What's...
[There's seconds of silence before the communicator picks up the rapidly growing sound of a roar. The sound suddenly begins to sound warped and distorted by the second, disappearing altogether as (what some may recognize) the sound of a Corridor being summoned overtakes the speaker.
Then there's coughing, and several other faint distortions in the communicator when sound finally returns. Several moments of silence pass, and then the post crackles into static.]
[ooc: as cleared here and here. Chez Nobody's been destroyed, so anyone around the building or nearby have free reign to report feeling something like an earthquake or something.]
[There's seconds of silence before the communicator picks up the rapidly growing sound of a roar. The sound suddenly begins to sound warped and distorted by the second, disappearing altogether as (what some may recognize) the sound of a Corridor being summoned overtakes the speaker.
Then there's coughing, and several other faint distortions in the communicator when sound finally returns. Several moments of silence pass, and then the post crackles into static.]
[ooc: as cleared here and here. Chez Nobody's been destroyed, so anyone around the building or nearby have free reign to report feeling something like an earthquake or something.]
[The communicator picks up the sound of soft laughter first, and then the very loud sound of something being eaten, lips smacking happily and then panting. The sound of sniffing soon follows.]
Off, boy. Here, give me that.
[Oro barks as he takes back the communicator, stuffing it in his pocket, not realizing it's still on.]
Okay. Sit. ...Siiiit. Good job. Here you go.
[There's silence, but the wolf is certainly enjoying more than he should of turkey in the background. There's a loud thud and laughing again.]
Down, down Oro. Don't beg.
Roxas? What is he-?
[There's a pause, and all goes quiet.]
...Run, boy! RUN!
[There's a distant shout and then Oro barks, the communicator shutting off immediately after.]
Off, boy. Here, give me that.
[Oro barks as he takes back the communicator, stuffing it in his pocket, not realizing it's still on.]
Okay. Sit. ...Siiiit. Good job. Here you go.
[There's silence, but the wolf is certainly enjoying more than he should of turkey in the background. There's a loud thud and laughing again.]
Down, down Oro. Don't beg.
Roxas? What is he-?
[There's a pause, and all goes quiet.]
...Run, boy! RUN!
[There's a distant shout and then Oro barks, the communicator shutting off immediately after.]
I've looked everywhere for days and he's... [A shallow sigh.] ...he's gone.
( Private to Self | Unhackable )
( Private to Self | Unhackable )
[In the background, if you listen closely, you'll be able to hear the sounds of chirping faintly. Roxas softly laughs.]
I look away for one day... I can't believe the new ones are hatched. [He sighs.] So that's...two chickens, three babies, and three newborns. At this rate, we'll have a bunch of them by the end of winter. That's a start.
[A pause, as though debating whether or not to turn off the communicator.]
Even when people disappear, more are brought in their place. I don't know if that's the Gods or Discordia or just...this place, but it makes you wonder how long we'll be here. Maybe some of us will go home tomorrow. Maybe we'll be in this place for another year or two.
[A pause.] I guess it's hard to treat each day like it's your last.
...And I wonder if that carnival place really does exist out in those woods.
I look away for one day... I can't believe the new ones are hatched. [He sighs.] So that's...two chickens, three babies, and three newborns. At this rate, we'll have a bunch of them by the end of winter. That's a start.
[A pause, as though debating whether or not to turn off the communicator.]
Even when people disappear, more are brought in their place. I don't know if that's the Gods or Discordia or just...this place, but it makes you wonder how long we'll be here. Maybe some of us will go home tomorrow. Maybe we'll be in this place for another year or two.
[A pause.] I guess it's hard to treat each day like it's your last.
...And I wonder if that carnival place really does exist out in those woods.
What happened last week... I'm sorry. I don't remember, but I know who he is. What he is. And it's... [A sigh.] This sounds so stupid.
I'm sorry. I really am. If there's anything I can do, I'll do it. But, can anyone...actually tell me what he did? Where was he all week? Did he hurt anyone?
( [Private to Self] )
I'm sorry. I really am. If there's anything I can do, I'll do it. But, can anyone...actually tell me what he did? Where was he all week? Did he hurt anyone?
( [Private to Self] )
[He sounds out of breath, and there's a good few moments before he finally says anything.]
Is everyone back now? What...What happened?
( OOC )
Is everyone back now? What...What happened?
( OOC )
